my extended metaphore

Here is my extended metaphore poem due monday, what do you all think?


If I were a bike, ide rather be blue


Not KTM orange or the color of roost



If I was the machine, who jumped so far


From dirt to dirt, so lightweight,


Unlike a car


That would deteriorate.



If I had, a motor so tourque so fast


So high preformance


That’d never be passed



Ide ride everyday, until I seize up


From the power inside me, that would never give up.
 
Here is my extended metaphore poem due monday, what do you all think?


If I were a bike, ide rather be blue


Not KTM orange or the color of roost



If I was the machine, who jumped so far


From dirt to dirt, so lightweight,


Unlike a car


That would deteriorate.



If I had, a motor so tourque so fast


So high preformance


That’d never be passed



Ide ride everyday, until I seize up


From the power inside me, that would never give up.

Good Job!

:clap: :hail: Roost to you when I can.
 
I like this one:
There once was a lady from whales,
She lived off he foreskin of snails,
When she could not find these,
She lived off the Cheese,
That she scraped from mens tools with her nails.


That should get you an A+
:lol: :smirk: :lol:
 
Good job Y-dogyz :thumb: As an aside, I used to have trouble with poetry back in my college days - that was until a had a couple of co-eds come over and help me out with my Longfellow...........
 
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